I took my time detailing how I want the correction to be including the word [613178]

Hi Danye,

I took my time detailing how I want the correction to be including the word
formatting and the fonts to be used. please take your time to go through the
document so that you can better understand how to d o the corrections.

Once we are good with the illustrations, I will send the other materials you need.
I have two documents here – one is the correction, the other is the words to be
used.

Page 6
Once upon a time there was a little boy called Santa.
His father’s name was Mr. Christmas and his mother, Mrs. Jingles bells.
(a picture of Santa and his parents at their home)

Page 7
Mr. Christmas was a jolly good fellow.
Every year -end, he would go around the City g iving lovely gifts to the children.
The streets will come alive with his music ,
glow ing with the beautiful magical candles
Mrs. Jingle bells had given him.
Despite having very lovely parents, Santa was oh well…
(a picture of Mr. Christmas in the street riding his sleigh and giving children gifts)

Page 8
A rambunctious kid…
He was always up to some mischief with his parents .
Santa would make a mess of his father ’s gifts .
He would burn off his mother ’s magic al candles.
He w ould run a round town all day scaring kids,
and he would throw apples at his elderly neighbors .
Nobody liked Santa ,
and nobody wanted to be friends with Santa.

(spot illustration –

– Santa spilling father’s gift
– Santa exploding mom’s candle
– Santa scaring children
– Santa throwing apples at the older couple)

Page 9
One beautiful morning as Mr. Christmas was getting ready for his delivery of gifts .
Santa sneaked to his father’s sleigh and cut off one of the ropes binding the
horses to the sleigh.
(Santa cutting off father’s sleigh.)

Page 10
Mr. Christmas did not know that Santa had cut off his sleigh ,
and off he went, galloping through the City.
As he rode to a corner of the woods,
his sleigh cut off .
He stumbled tsk tsk ! crash crash ! boom boom !
into the forest of entrapment . There he became trapped.
(Mr. Christmas tumbling down into the woods with Sleigh cut off.)

Page 11
Mrs. Jingles waited all da y, she could not find her husband.
Santa waited all day; he could not find his father.

The children of the town waited all day,
but there were no gifts from Mr. Christmas.
(spot illustration )
– Santa waiting for dad
– Mrs. Jingles sad
– Children waiting for Mr. Christmas)

Page 12
Everybody was sad .
For when Mr. Christmas brought gifts,
his music filled the air with Christmas carols ,
reminding everyone of the beauty of giving.
And of course,
they missed the beautiful candle lights
from Mrs. Jingles magical candles which lit up the City.
(children and people in street looking sad all thinking of Mr. Christmas)

Page 13
With no gifts from Mr. Christmas for days ,
and no candlelight’s glow from Mrs. Jingle Bells,
everyone became sad, and the City became gloomy .
(city looking dull, no lights)

Page 14
When Santa w ould go out to play ,
there were no happy children on the streets
for they had all stayed home in hopes
that Mr. Christmas would stop by with their gifts.
(Santa out looking for everyone, picture of houses with children indoor)

Page 15
Mrs. Jin gles was so sad she didn’t make Santa ’s favorite meal for days.
With out his fav orite meal ,
Without his father ,
Without children in the streets to play with,
Santa become so sad .
He cried and cried wishing he were a nicer boy.
(mom and Santa sad at home)

Page 16
Then he told his mother his bad deed.
“Mom, I cut off daddy’s sleigh, it’s all my fault he’s gone missing!”
“You have been a bad boy, Santa.” Mrs. Jingles said reproachfully.
“Go find your father or no food nor gifts for you.”
Santa nodded in agreement and decided to fix it.
To look for his father and to bring back happiness to the City.
(Santa heading out of their home)

Page 17
He went everywhere but could not find his father.
(spot illustrations – Santa searching for father in different places)

Page 18
Until he stumbled upon the forest of entrapment where his father was trapped.
“How may I help you, little one ?” the fairy asked.
“Have you seen my dad, Mr. Christmas?”
The fairy smiled, “Yes, he is right here.”
“Will you please take me to him ?” Santa asked.
“Not so fast! There are rules in my forest.”
“What rules miss fairy?” Santa asked.
(Santa and fairy talking in forest of enchantment)

Page 19
In this forest, for you to free your dad,
you will have to perform 12 good deeds for 12 days.”
“The first day, you will give one gift,” the fairy said.
“The second day, you shall give two gifts, the third, three gifts till the twelfth day.
“Each day you sha ll increase the gifts.
Only then will I release your father.”
(Santa and fairy still talking)

Page 20
“But I don’t have gifts!!” Santa wailed, “I don’t even know how to be nice.”
“You shall learn. That is the only way your father can be released.”

Santa c ried and cried, for he certainly did not know how to make gifts, nor did he
know where to find one like his father. But he missed his father so much he knew
he had to do the task.
(Santa said and storming off the forest thinking of his father.)

Page 21
He went to his mom . “Dad has been trapped in the forest of entrapment and the
fairy in charge demand I give gifts every day for 12 days before dad can be free.”
“Really??” Mrs. Jingles asked.
“Yes, but I do not know how to make gifts” he cried. “Will you help me mom?”
Mrs. Jingles looked at him pitifully and said, “okay Santa, I guess I can help you.”
(Santa and mom talking)

Page 22
Mrs. Jingles and Santa set out to work.
They made a long list of people in need of gifts.
(Santa and mom making a long list thinki ng of different children in need)

Page 23 and page 24 full spread.
The first day .
They made 1 wheelchair for eight years old Joan, who could not walk.
The second day, they gave 2 pair of Santa’s new shoes to the twins,
Jeff and Jefferson who never owned a shoe .

The third day, they baked 3 loaves of bread
for the hungry children that lived down their street.
The fourth day, they gave 4 pair of Santa’s new socks
to lina, Ivory, Rema, and John.
The fifth day, they gave 5 of Santa’s favorite books
to the children of the widow , who never owned a book.
The sixth day, they knitted 6 sweaters ,
and gave them to the beggar’s children down
the street who never owned a sweater.
(spot illustration per day showin g gestures in full spread)

PAGE 25 and 26 full spread.
The seventh day, they gave 7 candles
to the children of the castle to light up their rooms.
The eight day, they gave 8 mugs filled with hot chocolate
for the children down the house by the lake.
The n inth day, they gave 9 pair of earrings
to the girls at Rhinestone street.
The tenth day, they gave 10 pair of pants
to the boys at Ruby street.
The eleventh day, they gave 11 packs of food
to the children at the orphanage.
And the twelfth day, they gave 12 roses
to the old women who lived in the city.

(spot illustration per day showing gestures in full spread)

Page 27
At the end of each day,
Mrs. Jingles lit up the streets with her beautiful magical candles.
Everyone became happy once again .
(street filled with lights from Mrs. jingles can dles)
Page 28
The children loved their gifts so much they became friends with Santa and
followed him to the forest of entrapment to plead for Mr. Christmas’s release.
(the children hugging Santa)

Page 29
On their arrival, the fairy smiled and said,
“Santa, you have passed my tests . Your father shall be set free. ”
And Mr. Christmas was released .
But before they left,
the fairy had a little gift for Santa.
(Santa hugging father happily)

Page 30
She pointed her wand at him and said,

“To you I bestow the gift of giving, every year end, you shall have unlimited gifts
for the children of the world. Go forth and do right by this day which we shall be
called Christmas.”
(fairy casting spell on Santa with her wand)
page 31
And that day became known as Christmas day in honor of Santa’s father. It
became the day children all over the world received beautiful gifts from Santa…
(Older Santa in his sleight with gifts)